Day 1, p4 redo

--> psst don't forget the Day 1 Contest! <--

To show you all I am still working on this!
This is the last of the page remakes, I am stopping myself before I go too far again :'D
The rest of the pages will just get touch-ups, occasional panel remakes and detail checks.

Here's a link to the old page for comparison.

Characters, art and story belong to me!
_{I swear it just gets more and more acid}